(about two weeks after meeting up with Katie after 16 years…)
Deep slumber had eluded him for weeks. Tossing and turning in sweat soaked sheets he replayed the sweet rush of emotion as Katie offered herself to him, their first kiss leading to another and then …another.
Cheating was new to him. Before this his knowledge had been limited to continually offering forgiveness to Sara for her own indiscretions, so it pissed him off that to think that he was “one of those people” now. Yet wide awake before dawn, he finally saw the lies his marriage had harbored and whispered Katie’s name, willing his guilt to melt away into love.
This is an installement of my current project called Gathering Buttercups, which you can read more of HERE.
I am playing with three people today:
Lance’s 100 song prompt was ELEPHANT by Damien Rice (get your Kleenex ready this one is a heartbreaker)
Trifecta offered us the word “NEW” with this definition: having been in a relationship or condition for a short time.
And my first time with 100 word challenge with Velvet Verbosity using the word “SLUMBER.”
Can’t believe how you not only nailed all three of those link ups but how my heart aches for Lance in just so few words. Is it wrong that I want Lance and Katie to be together even before knowing all of the details? Is it because it is fiction? Would I feel like this in real life if I knew these people?
You’ve left me with so many questions in my head…love that! xo
well my friend, it’s a GOOD DAY! this comment, first thing in the morning was A GIFT and thank you for that. I’m just glad you like to read my stuff. Honestly. I don’t think it’s wrong to want Lance and Katie to be together, they want to be together (at least that is what they tell me..LOL) so why should you be any different???
I am going to keep this comment open today, to remind me that you’re my friend and that you liked it. YAY. xo
A seamless trio of challenges answered. It’s interesting to see Lance’s thought process for rationalizing his own indiscretion. Well done!
HI,
you did not go to spam!
Thank you for coming over to read it and for this comment. Lance is done rationalizing, he is done with forgiving everyone their sins and ready to um, sin on his own.
It’s impossible to not relate to Lit Lance. Having a heart that belongs in two or more places is something that can crush men and women.
The way you blended THREE prompts was brilliant. I hope Tri and Velvet appreciate your work here. I know Leeroy and I do.
terrific 100. Bravo.
I think all of us, at one point of another, relate to him.
And as far as blending the prompts I’m hoping it was dumb luck, but thank you for saying it. I always want my 100 words for you and Leeroy to make you proud( or at the very least NOT make you roll your eyes. )
I loved it…the intensity…very vivid state of mind to be in.I felt it all…thank you for sharing
thank you so much for this comment. I’m always happy when anyone wants to read me, to say you liked it, it such a gift. Thank you.
Love the last sentence — it raises so many interesting thoughts about what’s important. Nicely done.
well I loved this comment, I’m so glad that this one is touching on so many emotions…and someone said to me today that they didn’t “hate Lance” anymore. My work is done, he’s likable and so is Kate even in their infidelity.
It means a lot to me to have you commment (or even read my story) thank you.
I like that you used this for 3 different writing challenges and they fit well into each one. That is impressive! Great work, Kir.
ah thank you Mel..it’s always so nice to see you over here. HOnestly , I’m just glad I could make it work. Plus I just like that you enjoy reading me. I’ll be over to you soon.
Zowie – these people are seriously complicated. I like that in a cheating couple. I kind of think he’s going to be stuck with Sara in the long run, though.
well if cheating were easy, how much fun would it be??
I wouldn’t count on him staying with Sara…..it’s not likely at this point.
Hmmm… true. I think I meant more that I have skepticism about whether or not he’ll end up with Katie.
right now, in my head, these two are going to end up together…getting there doesn’t look pretty, but the ending is happy. It is ME after all.
Damn, that boy is like a horny teenager
I think that’s a true statement, he is in love with Katie, that I know (he tells me that ) but yes other body parts are happy too
(see maybe you should have read this before I hit publish!!)
Well, here’s hoping that, having made his choice, sleep no longer eludes him. Insomnia might be worse than guilt.
I guess I’m in the minority. All I can think about is how selfish Lance and Katie are being.
you know, it’s ok. I think that is what makes writing so good and subjective. That we all bring our own experience to what is happening. I think they are being selfish too, in a way, but love is love and please don’t doubt this, they love each other and have for a long time.
thanks for reading it, even if it makes you mad or uncormfortable or wanting to slap me, all those reactions are good ones.
This hits a little to close to home. First hand memories. What you have done is captured the physical feel of guilt, so for that, well done!
I’m sorry? I never want something to make you feel uncomfortable but if the emotion is real, then this has done it’s job? thank you for just coming over to read it, that means a lot to me.
Usually when writers address more than one challenge in a single post, you can kind of feel it. One of the prompts almost always feels forced. Or added on. This is definitely not true of this piece. I really enjoyed it. Great job!
Thank you, I’m so happy that it didn’t sound forced or pushed. Thank you so much, I am thrilled you liked it.
Self-realization is better than swimming in that river of denial…right? Awesome 100!
HI! thanks so much for coming over to say Hi and reading it, I’m glad you liked it (and didn’t roll your eyes , truly) It means a lot to me to have you think it was good. THANK YOU.
Great job! Three prompts in one – I’m duly impressed.
Oh you came over!!! Thank you, thank you for letting me play along, I hope to become part of the group!!!
so glad you visited, thank you.
I love the shame this song pulls. “Deep slumber eluded him…” So good to point out the anxiety how uncomfortable he feels in his new, devious role.
hi Jen!! thank you for visiting and commenting, I do love when you visit. he feels uncomfortable but he also knows that he is done trying to hide his feelings, which is going to keep him up anyway.
so glad you liked it.